Cole, Lucy ((Edited Again))

[lucycole7]

WELCOME TO ISLA DE LOS LOBOS,

LUCY JUNE COLE !
| SPUNKY | LONER | CURIOUS |

[BASICS]
... easy to say
Name: Lucille June Cole
Nicknames: Lucy
Age: 26 years old
Birthdate: April, seventeenth
Gender: Female
Species: Bitten werewolf
Member Group: Commoner
Canon or Original: Original

[THE LOOKS]
... don't let them get to you
Height: 5’5”
Weight: 121 pounds
Build: Slender
Hair Color: Ginger
Eye Color: Green
Wolf & Werewolf form: Lucy shifts into a large white werewolf with red eyes, 9’10” and 132 pounds which is her weight plus ten pounds of muscle. Her wolf form is completely different. Her wolf form has light red fur like her hair, golden eyes and is shaped like a Husky.
Play- By: Kate Mara

[INSIDE]
who you really are...
Personality: Lucy is a kind person who loves mysteries and is very curious. A mystery will bug her until she solves it and it’s so exciting about the unknown. Ever since Lucy was attacked randomly and she became a werewolf she’s been trying to find out who attacked her and how to control herself. She goes through pain every full moon and just wants to learn how to not kill people.
Likes: Full moons, forests, exploring, mysteries and the color emerald green
Dislikes: Changing into a werewolf, the beach, sand, too much sun and the color yellow
Strengths: She is a quick thinker, can think herself out of any situation, she is merciful and is a very fast runner when she is in human form.
Weaknesses: Lucy is very curious so that gets her in trouble and being too trustful always gets her in trouble because she can’t tell who is bad or good. She also has a weakness to children and will choose them over anything.
Family Members: She has a biological family because but she doesn’t know who they are. She did have lots of brothers and sisters in the orphanage and a foster mom named Isabella.
History: Lucy doesn’t know where she was born because she was left on the doorstep of an orphanage. The place she called home was a very nice place, she had lots of brothers and sisters and went to school. She loved learning, she excelled in everything and her favorite subject was History. Lucy always wondered why her parents gave her up and she finally decided that it was because they couldn’t take care of her or didn’t want her. Or she was an accident.

In school Lucy was taught that werewolves were hulking evil beasts that killed people but in stories they were cursed creatures that accidently killed people. She didn't know what to believe and hoped one day she could meet one to ask him questions.

Though Lucy always wondered what happened to her parents or where they were and wanted to find them so after she finished school she started travelling. Lucy had only a little bit of money so every few days she would take part time waitressing jobs or cleaning jobs until she had enough money to continue travelling to her next destination.

One horrible night Lucy was attacked. She was camping because she didn’t have enough money for a motel. She was eating dinner, a can of Spagetti O’s and she heard growling and that was all she could remember. She never remembered anything after that she just remembered bites and scratches, growls and pain. Lucy woke up in the hospital a few days layer completely bandage and the doctors told her she would be in the hospital for months with physical and mental scars. However a week later Lucy was completely healed. She was told she just had a strong metabolism and Lucy left never to be seen again.

She continued her travels until one night in a small town in Colorado Lucy started having pain through her whole body. She didn’t know what was going on so she ran out of where she was staying and headed to the hospital but she didn’t get that far. As the full moon came out Lucy shifted for her first time into a white werewolf. She blacked out and the next morning she woke up with a dead body beside her and she was completely naked with dried blood on her. She of course freaked out but being the positive person she is she decided to not go to the police and look for someone to help her. She decided to find some other werewolves.

Recently Lucy has continued searching for her parents but is also searching for someone who is like her and can teach her how to control her shifts during the full moon. She has heard there is a certain island near Florida and is heading towards it now.

[THE PUPPETEER]
... behind the curtain
Alias: Heather
Experience: 5 years
How you found us: Google
Other characters: N/A
How we should contact you: [e-mail]

THIS APPLICATION WAS MADE BY FROSTFERN OF CAUTIPN 2.0. DO NOT REMOVE THESE CREDITS OR I WILL FIND OUT. APPLICATION EDITED BY: (ADMINWHOACCEPTEDTHEAPPUSERNAMEHERE)

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[La Luna]

PENDING!

I hate to say this, but there are a good many things about this application that needs fixing.

First of all, your PB is not age appropriate. You need to find someone who is a teen and looks around sixteen.

Secondly, your wolf and werewolf form is too short . I know in the template it says it doesn't have to be long, but you need to clarify what she looks like in wolf form and werewolf form because there is a possibility that her werewolf form could look different from her wolf form, and what her build is and what her height would be in werewolf form.

Thirdly, me and Vaan feel that you are not following the guidelines that we, the admins, have set up for the lycans on the site. We kind of feel like you might be going off your own guidelines. As if you haven't read any of the information on the lycans at all.

Fourth, this kind of ties into the third issue, but you need to come up with other strengths because all lycans have those strengths and the weakness to silver, so they're obviously already implied when you're making a lycan. They don't necessarily have to be phsyical strengths and weaknesses either.

And Finally, the history. I'm not saying the history is bad. I find it a very interesting history, but you need to flesh it out some more. There is a 300 word minimum on the history and you didn't make it to 300. There are plenty of things that you could do to flesh out the history, like explain why her parents gave her up. Try and think of the the finer details of her history and use that to flesh it out too.

[La Luna]

PENDING!
Okay, look, Me and Hayley aren't trying to be mean, but we still feel like you're not following the guidelines that we've set up for the lycans on this site. So please, re-read through them as you work on your application.

I really hate to do this, but I'm afraid we're going to have to deny the application if it's still not up to par after you revise it.

Okay, now, the the werewolf form is much better, but there is one tiny detail. We would prefer you use a real breed of wolf as your reference breed because a winter wolf isn't an actual breed. It's a breed created in Dungeons and Dragons.

The next thing are your weaknesses and strengths. For one thing, you only have two weaknesses, and as I said earlier, one is already an implied weakness that doesn't need to be listed, so you need to take that one out and make up two new ones. And you also need to take out the super strengths out for the same reasons as the silver. And you don't need to have those little explanations for the weaknesses and strengths.

Next is family. She does have a biological family, she just doesn't know who they are. If she doesn't know her biological family then just put Unknown and the name of her foster mother.